One inhuman satellite

Mar 31, 2008 - 12:18 PM PST
The sun hangs up above my head
The beauty of the sky
And as I gaze into her rays
I feel this day is mine

Walking slowly through the glade
Scorched grass yields under pressure
The morning sun denies all shade
From smoldering beams

I think we’ve been here once before
Excess layers left at your door
The sun set soon, we wished for more
But we knew we’d have it soon
Make way for the crystal moon

The day has left so once again
I’ll retreat home, put on my shoes
Ready for the night ahead
Yeah I’m ready for some fun

Night owls, they begin to rise
I’m one of them, this is my time
Some beauty creeps into this place
This kingdom of lies

The moon draws stares, so pale and sad
It mourns the loss of one more day
One inhuman satellite
Reflects our most secret emotions

This night is dead so once again
I’ll stumble home into my bed
Ready for a repeat
I hope we get a repeat.

One inhuman satellite


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Apr 08, 2008 - 18:11 PM

thegreatwhitedj on
sounds Jim Morrison ishy if im allowed tosay that...great stuff..props
Mar 31, 2008 - 21:03 PM

crimsonladybug on
I really get the feeling of a song in the third stanza. That's where your rhyme and meter are strongest and I can almost hear someone singing it. I could see that being the chorus. All in all, great job.
Mar 31, 2008 - 19:21 PM

chicklitgurrl on
you do a great job in setting a mood, a tone, and creating great images to convey that mood, that tone. this does feel, however, a bit more poetic than what i might hear in lyrics...

ever thought about spoken poetry?
Mar 31, 2008 - 12:50 PM

Franchise on
Excellent stanzas. It seems too poetic to be lyrics for a song. Is the third set of lines the chorus? All in all I enjoyed the imagery and expressions you've made here.