just my first thing (L)

May 23, 2008 - 07:58 AM PST
the first day I was born. was the first day I felt tears fall.
the first day I dreamt. was the last day I wanted to sleep.
the first promise I made. was the next thing I regret.
the first date I had. was giving me a reason to sing for the next lady I left.
the last thing I forgot .was the first thing I loved.
And now I am standing alone. Like people who forgot

just my first thing (L)


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Jun 27, 2008 - 10:23 AM

chicklitgurrl on
like the movement of the "first" lines. the fourth line...needs a "was" to keep up with that ongoing rhythm.