castrophony | Coeur D Alene, ID  • United States , Age 32
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Clothesline Religion



Mar 13, 2008 - 16:12 PM PST

Baby's spoon
Leaded
Mound of pepper
Breaded

Thick line
Permanent chalk
Six inches, four sides
Walk

One-foot
Hopscotch
On white sheets
Threads top-notch

Clean stained panties
Drying out
In the front yard
Milkman in route

On the clothsline
Hanging there
Saved till later
For me to ware


By me,
Castrophony
a.k.a. Mary Celeste

Title: Clothesline Religion
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Added: 03-13-2008
Channel: Writing
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Mar 13, 2008 - 18:35 PM
i really like this poem. it's very, eh "objective correlative." sort of image + image + image + image = feeling.

love the "clean stained panties." but i'm partial to surprise.

simplicity is always best -- the short lines, small images. yet the words you choose are not simple, they give a nice rhythm and sound, and takes a really good ear to create.

really really nice

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