writergirl01 | Rancho Cucamonga, CA  • United States , Age 19
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Reduced to a poem.



Feb 17, 2008 - 09:10 AM PST

exist exist exist.
That's all I really wanted
I wanted to exist to you.
See me.
Are you looking at me or
only in my direction?
Your eyes are green and pale,
mine the same but dark.
Dark.
You and her, have hate wars
and flirting conversations.
She was my friend long before
you ever broke her, broke us
Broke me.
All I want is something more
Something real, true and
I need you to hold me and tell me
That she was your biggest mistake
And that I'm all you ever wanted.
All along.

Title: Reduced to a poem.
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Added: 02-17-2008
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Oct 03, 2008 - 21:27 PM
...a tid but creepy, if you look at it from a guy;s point of view.
Kinda sad too.
but all in all, a very awesome charater write (at least I hope it's a charater write, if not...well...yikes.)

Mar 27, 2008 - 06:06 AM
Very strong opening, the pathos is very close to the surface, and nicely expressed.

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